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you can talk about how ski patrol nuked it
talk about tanner hall a bit maybe, if your teacher isnt strict about going a lil off topic.
I think the part where you explained the meme could be less rushed, you didnt put much spacing or breaks in between the explanations. On the first paragrah, kinda shortly mention how it became an iconic meme in skiing and tghe newschoolers community, then make a seperate paragraph about the meme and how it originated.
make sure it sounds more proffesional too
nah man you got everything covered. You just need to make it more detailed and organized. Split it up into five paragraphs like a normal report. 5 paragraphs with 5 sentences each will get you over that limit easy.
I'm noticing a couple of problems right off the bat Zach. Essays for a high school English class are a type of persuasive writing. They follow a predictable pattern, and sticking to that pattern will get you an A.
- First you need a thesis, this is the point that you are trying to convince your reader of. So, we need to change your title to be a statement of your thesis, not a question. A title that is a question (Is Chad's Gap Iconic?) implies you are going to examine both sides, first the arguments for why, then the arguments for why not, then weigh the arguments and answer the question. That is way too long and sophisticated for a high school essay. Instead, title your essay "Chad's Gap is the Most Iconic Jump in Skiing," then try to prove that point.
- Second, how do we prove a point in a high school essay? We come up with several reasons why our thesis is true, then we write a paragraph about each of those reasons, giving specific examples. It is universally agreed that at the high school level 3 point/paragraphs is sufficient. In your case, you seem to think that the existence of memes is evidence that the jump is culturally important, that's great, that can be one of your paragraphs. But, the problem is that you start giving examples (my ankles are broken) right in the introduction paragraph, confusing your reader. If the existence of memes is one of your 3 points, give it it's own paragraph and keep all the examples in that paragraph.
- Third, we need to fit your ideas into the classic high school essay structure: intro, then your 3 reasons (each gets its own paragraph), conclusion (5 paragraphs total). The intro should contain your thesis clearly stated in 1 sentence, then a quick preview of the 3 reasons you will give (without specific examples). I think your reasons so far include the prevalence of online media (pictures and videos) and the existence of memes, so you will need one more. Then, each of your 3 content paragraphs should elaborate on your reasons, giving specific examples (often quotes from media like books, magazines, and websites are used as example, so don't forget to cite your source if you quote someone). Each of these paragraphs should be about 5 sentences, but that isn't a hard and fast rule.
Follow this advice and get an easy A.
source: I was briefly an English teacher before I went back to school for a different career.
SharkoI'm noticing a couple of problems right off the bat Zach. Essays for a high school English class are a type of persuasive writing. They follow a predictable pattern, and sticking to that pattern will get you an A.
- First you need a thesis, this is the point that you are trying to convince your reader of. So, we need to change your title to be a statement of your thesis, not a question. A title that is a question (Is Chad's Gap Iconic?) implies you are going to examine both sides, first the arguments for why, then the arguments for why not, then weigh the arguments and answer the question. That is way too long and sophisticated for a high school essay. Instead, title your essay "Chad's Gap is the Most Iconic Jump in Skiing," then try to prove that point.
- Second, how do we prove a point in a high school essay? We come up with several reasons why our thesis is true, then we write a paragraph about each of those reasons, giving specific examples. It is universally agreed that at the high school level 3 point/paragraphs is sufficient. In your case, you seem to think that the existence of memes is evidence that the jump is culturally important, that's great, that can be one of your paragraphs. But, the problem is that you start giving examples (my ankles are broken) right in the introduction paragraph, confusing your reader. If the existence of memes is one of your 3 points, give it it's own paragraph and keep all the examples in that paragraph.
- Third, we need to fit your ideas into the classic high school essay structure: intro, then your 3 reasons (each gets its own paragraph), conclusion (5 paragraphs total). The intro should contain your thesis clearly stated in 1 sentence, then a quick preview of the 3 reasons you will give (without specific examples). I think your reasons so far include the prevalence of online media (pictures and videos) and the existence of memes, so you will need one more. Then, each of your 3 content paragraphs should elaborate on your reasons, giving specific examples (often quotes from media like books, magazines, and websites are used as example, so don't forget to cite your source if you quote someone). Each of these paragraphs should be about 5 sentences, but that isn't a hard and fast rule.
Follow this advice and get an easy A.
source: I was briefly an English teacher before I went back to school for a different career.
Right now you're just describing Chads gap. That serves as a good foundation but it's pretty weak in substance, especially for an English class.
You should go on to really illustrate the impact it has on young skiiers who dream of working their way through the sport in hopes of being able to hit chads.
Or how Skiing is, in itself, " Conquering the Useless". Why do people risk their bodies and lives, spending countless hours, to achieve something that is essentially useless? Unless you're pro, skiing serves no practical purpose, yet here we all are. Dive into that idea, and tie Chad's gap into that.
SharkoI'm noticing a couple of problems right off the bat Zach. Essays for a high school English class are a type of persuasive writing. They follow a predictable pattern, and sticking to that pattern will get you an A.
- First you need a thesis, this is the point that you are trying to convince your reader of. So, we need to change your title to be a statement of your thesis, not a question. A title that is a question (Is Chad's Gap Iconic?) implies you are going to examine both sides, first the arguments for why, then the arguments for why not, then weigh the arguments and answer the question. That is way too long and sophisticated for a high school essay. Instead, title your essay "Chad's Gap is the Most Iconic Jump in Skiing," then try to prove that point.
- Second, how do we prove a point in a high school essay? We come up with several reasons why our thesis is true, then we write a paragraph about each of those reasons, giving specific examples. It is universally agreed that at the high school level 3 point/paragraphs is sufficient. In your case, you seem to think that the existence of memes is evidence that the jump is culturally important, that's great, that can be one of your paragraphs. But, the problem is that you start giving examples (my ankles are broken) right in the introduction paragraph, confusing your reader. If the existence of memes is one of your 3 points, give it it's own paragraph and keep all the examples in that paragraph.
- Third, we need to fit your ideas into the classic high school essay structure: intro, then your 3 reasons (each gets its own paragraph), conclusion (5 paragraphs total). The intro should contain your thesis clearly stated in 1 sentence, then a quick preview of the 3 reasons you will give (without specific examples). I think your reasons so far include the prevalence of online media (pictures and videos) and the existence of memes, so you will need one more. Then, each of your 3 content paragraphs should elaborate on your reasons, giving specific examples (often quotes from media like books, magazines, and websites are used as example, so don't forget to cite your source if you quote someone). Each of these paragraphs should be about 5 sentences, but that isn't a hard and fast rule.
Follow this advice and get an easy A.
source: I was briefly an English teacher before I went back to school for a different career.
Adding to this, if your teacher can't clearly tell which sentence in your intro is your thesis... you're definitely at maybe a B/C before they go any further.
The ideal request for which you can get a good answer. Since ideas have the property to end, I always use the site with book works. Not so long ago I used an essay for a book https://freebooksummary.com/to-kill-a-mockingbird-is-atticus-finch-a-good-father-444 in which a character describes his brave friend, a man who was an example to him throughout his acquaintance. A quality website, which is not only used by me. Always advise friends and acquaintances.
If you have a problem with both finding idea and writing an essay, you can just outsource it to other people for the small amount of money. Last year I had a big problem in college - almost got kicked out because I didn't write a single essay in the semester. I solved this problem by using service of the essaystudio.org site. I just gave them money and said what academic discipline since I need essays and they did all for me. All I had to do is to read it and give it to teachers. You can do the same stuff.
**This post was edited on Feb 3rd 2020 at 5:50:14am
NS has the weirdest bots. Who falls for this shit? It can't possibly be worth the effort. Nobody is on this site is interested in buying papers. 95% of us won't even write a thesis.
BrandoComandoNS has the weirdest bots. Who falls for this shit? It can't possibly be worth the effort. Nobody is on this site is interested in buying papers. 95% of us won't even write a thesis.
I clicked the link and now Quickbooks won’t close. My damn kid has been on the kazoo downloading Lincoln Park songs and must have given me a virus. Can you click the link and tell me what it says? It wouldn’t be highlighted blue if it wasn’t important.
