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ascent_studios
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Post your work here for other people to check out and critique!

Constructive only, no bad vibes.
Feb 12 2016 4:56PM
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Chubz.
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JibbaTheHuttI'd say some decent stabilisation is needed, it wasn't awful by any means but a few shaky/jerky shots did detract from the overall edit.

I also wasn't sure if there was any theme to the edit, it seemed to cut between different people in different resorts and then to urban and then back to park, i would have liked to have seen a little more consistency.


Thanks for the critique! Appreciate it.

Im shooting without a glidecam right now..so thats why my shots arent as smooth as they should be. I also didnt really follow much of a theme for it. I just wanted a compilation of my favorite clips but i should go for a theme with most of the shit i make.

Thanks again for taking the time to watch it and give me your thoughts i appreciate it.
Feb 29 2016 11:16PM
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ascent_studios
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Chubz.Yooo people!!

Just threw this together the last 2 days and figured i'd toss it in here



https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/815807/Josh-McIntire----Reel


That was pretty sick. Ik this is repeated a lot and I don't always follow it either but get closer on a few of the follow cams.

MonnorCartinDouble post, but thoughts? I know a could of the clips are off sync with the music. Thinking of using a different song, any suggestions?

https://vimeo.com/157080289


It was just made private
Feb 29 2016 11:31PM
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MonnorCartin
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ben_collinsIt was just made private


Just made it private cause I'm uploading a new and hopefully improved version
Feb 29 2016 11:44PM
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MonnorCartin
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Here it is, critique up!!


https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/816753/DAMN-DANIEL
Mar 1 2016 12:19AM
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ascent_studios
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MonnorCartinHere it is, critique up!!


https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/816753/DAMN-DANIEL


I'm just gonna be straight forward and say I don't like the song. I also think you could get closer on the follow cams but besides that nice job.
Mar 1 2016 7:22AM
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liamrashotte
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MonnorCartinHere it is, critique up!!


https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/816753/DAMN-DANIEL


This was better than the last for sure but the song was atrocious... From the looks of your Vimeo it was your first video so apart from the song it was pretty great
Mar 1 2016 10:25AM
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gooser
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What would make this shot better? Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
Mar 1 2016 3:15PM
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ascent_studios
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goofyguuseWhat would make this shot better? Any feedback is greatly appreciated.


Thats a cool shot! For some reason I can't see the full image when I click it so I can't really give you any critiques. The file size may be too big
Mar 2 2016 10:19PM
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finnolydorb
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Just uploaded this project and am looking for some honest feedback. Don't know how to embed so I'll just drop a link. https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817244/--RETRIBUTION--?c=11
Mar 2 2016 11:52PM
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ascent_studios
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finnolydorbJust uploaded this project and am looking for some honest feedback. Don't know how to embed so I'll just drop a link. https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817244/--RETRIBUTION--?c=11


That was really sick! The only thing that I would say is I don't like the titles and at one point you had two chairlift shots one after each other. I also really like the beginning shot. How did you pull that shot off?
Mar 3 2016 7:19AM
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finnolydorb
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ben_collinsThat was really sick! The only thing that I would say is I don't like the titles and at one point you had two chairlift shots one after each other. I also really like the beginning shot. How did you pull that shot off?


Thanks for the feedback man.

The text thing was just an experimental thing I tried and I'm not that happy with it either. As for the first shot I think it was shot at around 135 mm. To get it steady enough I just rested the bottom of the glidecam on my leg and tried to hold it reletively steady.
Mar 3 2016 10:17AM
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ascent_studios
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My updated reel from 2015 and part of 2016
Any critiques welcome

https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/810498/Session-Cinema---Film-Reel-2016
Mar 7 2016 10:42PM
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Chubz.
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MonnorCartinHere it is, critique up!!


https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/816753/DAMN-DANIEL


That was fucking hilarious
Mar 7 2016 11:38PM
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winniecash
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ben_collinsMy updated reel from 2015 and part of 2016
Any critiques welcome

https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/810498/Session-Cinema---Film-Reel-2016


i liked the idea of some of yours shots but i think you need some better stablezation to really make the shots really good if that makes sense. ur video was good altogether, i liked how u used the slow mo but again a better stablelization would make it a ton better
Mar 8 2016 10:24AM
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Miclovin
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/818155/LCP-EL-PACINO-

let me know what you guys think, I filmed most of it and edited all
Mar 8 2016 4:01PM
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cb27.
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First Ever video i've shot with my dslr.
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/818531/Early-Spring---A-Trampoline-Edit
Mar 9 2016 8:24PM
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StokeFactor
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/818459/The-Stoke-Factor---Revival

My latest edit. This year isn't a strong one for me with school, other projects and east coast weather but I'm still stoked I was able to film a little something.

Lemme know what you guys think!
Mar 10 2016 12:44AM
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Chubz.
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StokeFactorhttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/818459/The-Stoke-Factor---Revival

My latest edit. This year isn't a strong one for me with school, other projects and east coast weather but I'm still stoked I was able to film a little something.

Lemme know what you guys think!


that was sick! Whatd you film with?

my only piece of advice is to make sure the skier is facing the camera when they're on rails, and at the end don't fade away before the dude lands his trick. Other than that i thought it was pretty solid!

just put this out last week, thoughts?
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817475/Mikey-Boyer----Program
Mar 10 2016 5:23PM
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AwhilePrep
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Can you let me know what you think of my videos? I'm slowly getting better I think.
https://youtu.be/0e4Q20tIKTU

Thanks
Mar 10 2016 5:35PM
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StokeFactor
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Chubz.that was sick! Whatd you film with?

my only piece of advice is to make sure the skier is facing the camera when they're on rails, and at the end don't fade away before the dude lands his trick. Other than that i thought it was pretty solid!

just put this out last week, thoughts?
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817475/Mikey-Boyer----Program


Thanks for the feedback, will take these tips in note for next time for sure !

For your edit your angles are really sick and the speed variations are well edited too. I'm not a fan of the music, I think you could've choose something less repetitive but that's just my opinion. The edit still matched the song pretty well tho!
Mar 11 2016 1:18AM
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StokeFactor
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Chubz.Whatd you film with?

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Sorry forgot to answer, Panasonic G7

Can you let me know what you think of my videos? I'm slowly getting better I think.
https://youtu.be/0e4Q20tIKTU

Thanks[/QUOTE]

You have a lot of slowmo where the trick isn't really that interesting, also I'd work the intro (title, logo integration, shaky shots) and the edit was a bit too long. Sometimes your angles are creative put you cut important parts of the tricks or landings, follow cam are getting better tho wich is nice.

I'd say keep looking at pro edits and ask yourself everything that can be achieved to get a result closer from what they create. Good luck!
Mar 11 2016 1:28AM
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ascent_studios
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StokeFactorhttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/818459/The-Stoke-Factor---Revival


That was good! The Like Chubz said, make sure the skier is facing towards you on the rail. Also the fade at the end showed the grain and then it went to black and I thought that was a little weird.

Chubz.just put this out last week, thoughts?
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817475/Mikey-Boyer----Program


That was dope. The shots were a bit shaky so if you have the money I would invest in a glidecam or something like that.
Mar 11 2016 7:19AM
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murphyboiiii
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815697

1 day of filming
1 day of editing
this is how it turned out, also if someone could help me identify the trick at 0:36 that would be sick, I think its bio sev but i cant tell

critique away!
Mar 16 2016 12:40PM
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ascent_studios
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murphyboiiii815697

1 day of filming
1 day of editing
this is how it turned out, also if someone could help me identify the trick at 0:36 that would be sick, I think its bio sev but i cant tell

critique away!


That was good. I think its a rodeo 7 but don't quote me on that
Mar 16 2016 1:28PM
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murphyboiiii
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just put this out last week, thoughts?
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/817475/Mikey-Boyer----Program[/QUOTE]


invest into some home insurance cuz this b hot fire
Mar 16 2016 2:00PM
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cb27.
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murphyboiiii815697

1 day of filming
1 day of editing
this is how it turned out, also if someone could help me identify the trick at 0:36 that would be sick, I think its bio sev but i cant tell

critique away!


Im pretty sure its a bio sev
Mar 16 2016 5:28PM
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ascent_studios
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murphyboiiii815697

1 day of filming
1 day of editing
this is how it turned out, also if someone could help me identify the trick at 0:36 that would be sick, I think its bio sev but i cant tell

critique away!


Actually another thing I noticed when I watched this again was that on most of the clips you can bring up the exposure a lot.
Mar 17 2016 11:25PM
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M.M
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Lookin for some more critique

https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/812174/ILLAB----Matt-Martin

https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/815790/ILLAB----CHAPTER-3
Mar 18 2016 3:06AM
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ascent_studios
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M.Mhttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/815790/ILLAB----CHAPTER-3


I already critiqued the other one so I guess I will do this one

That was sick. I would just be careful with having your(the filmers) skis in the shot and also I would throw in some more b-roll when you switch riders
Mar 19 2016 12:59PM
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Pataguccimane
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Thought i'd throw my reel in here that I made a couple weeks back.


2016 Showreel from Nolan Johnson on Vimeo.
Mar 21 2016 2:39PM
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Pataguccimane
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dammit that embed didn't work.
here it is:

https://vimeo.com/156054024
Mar 21 2016 2:41PM
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ascent_studios
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DoleThought i'd throw my reel in here that I made a couple weeks back.


2016 Showreel from Nolan Johnson on Vimeo.


That was sick, one thing I would say is you should add more natural sounds such as the rails, bikes, birds, etc.
Mar 22 2016 8:14PM
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morse
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/821395/FTS-EASTER?c=11

first edit not filmed with a gopro. let me know what I'm doing right and wrong.
Mar 27 2016 4:28PM
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ascent_studios
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FTShttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/821395/FTS-EASTER?c=11

first edit not filmed with a gopro. let me know what I'm doing right and wrong.


You should definitely get some sort of stabilizer. Footage was super shaky
Mar 27 2016 9:31PM
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AwhilePrep
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Hows this edit. Any feed back would be great. thanks

https://youtu.be/byNEvOF8vYs
Mar 28 2016 3:49PM
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Forcillo
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/821618/Zippy

Was going for a short, simple, no frills kind of feel, let me know what ya think
Mar 28 2016 5:39PM
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ascent_studios
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Forcillohttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/821618/Zippy

Was going for a short, simple, no frills kind of feel, let me know what ya think


I liked it. There was a lot of broll especially in the beginning tho. I feel like you could have gotten to the skiing a lot faster
Mar 28 2016 10:39PM
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JCTheut
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/823127/Jack-Theut----Touch-of-Grey

Heres my season edit. Any tips or changes I should make would be great. Thanks
Apr 6 2016 12:22PM
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ascent_studios
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JCTheuthttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/823127/Jack-Theut----Touch-of-Grey

Heres my season edit. Any tips or changes I should make would be great. Thanks


I didn't really like the song. Also don't use the same angle over and over again and try to get some natural sounds (rails, landings, etc.) and some b-roll in their as well
Apr 13 2016 4:00PM
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JCTheut
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ben_collinsI didn't really like the song. Also don't use the same angle over and over again and try to get some natural sounds (rails, landings, etc.) and some b-roll in their as well

Thanks dude, I agree that I need to get more angles next time. I'm also going to work on incooperating sound in my future edits as well!
Apr 13 2016 6:01PM
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https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/824873/Buck-Hill-Bouncers-Season-Recap


Crucify me!
Apr 14 2016 9:45PM
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ascent_studios
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nollie.onhttps://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/824873/Buck-Hill-Bouncers-Season-Recap


Crucify me!


That was pretty good except for a few things. The shot on the rope tow was very very shaky and could be taken out. Also the text was very boring and it was just arial pretty much
Apr 14 2016 10:17PM
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kevdog2000
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8B4aib3WZhg

Please tell me what I can do to make this better. I am only a kid and trying to be a good videographer.
Apr 14 2016 10:21PM
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ascent_studios
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kevdog2000https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8B4aib3WZhg

Please tell me what I can do to make this better. I am only a kid and trying to be a good videographer.


The intro was so cheesy also you don't need to write "a film by ..." for a 1:45 video.
You should add some b-roll in because just only skiing gets boring, also you shouldn't put the images of the mountains in the beginning because it looks cheesy. Also try to get more angles than just static angles going over and over again. Try to move with the skier or at least switch up the static angle and don't make it so that its in the same place
Apr 17 2016 10:46AM
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M.M
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To keep this thread goin, and always lookin to improve
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/825852/ILLAB----CHAPTER-4
Apr 27 2016 1:10AM
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ascent_studios
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M.MTo keep this thread goin, and always lookin to improve
https://www.newschoolers.com/videos/watch/825852/ILLAB----CHAPTER-4


That was sick. I just didn't like the crossfades
Apr 27 2016 7:30AM
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Birddogmurray
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https://vimeo.com/166631237

All feedback really appreciated!
May 14 2016 1:17PM
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Birddogmurray
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May 14 2016 1:18PM
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finnolydorb
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q3nhaDOcXpE

Still don't know how to embed but give me some feedback. I think the audio could be much better and there should be more of it, and I could put much more time into colouring. Anything else?
May 14 2016 5:57PM
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ascent_studios
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finnolydorbhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q3nhaDOcXpE

Still don't know how to embed but give me some feedback. I think the audio could be much better and there should be more of it, and I could put much more time into colouring. Anything else?


Try not to digitally zoom in so much that you lose quality
Also the beeps at the beginning were extremely annoying and there was no audio at all through the entire thing
Also have you heard the normal version of that song? It doesn't have the annoying parts with people talking in it
May 14 2016 8:16PM
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