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GSPhotography
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Anybody good at writting poems. I need one for tomorrow am . 15 lines, 1 métaphore no need for rhymes. 20$ to thé person that Can do that
Oct 7 2013 9:59PM
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CosmicBrownie
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That sounds so easy you cant do it yourself?
Oct 7 2013 10:01PM
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flyingsqirrel3
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just a little bit longer
the children said
as the storm approached them
in their boat on the sea

He knew the storm would be bad
but he couldn't deprive
the children of fishing
in their boat on the sea

the head of the storm approached
like a freight train
not seeming to be moving
but coming, always coming towards
their boat on the sea

finally, he decided to head in
but he was too late
the storm was a cheetah
and their boat on the sea
was a gazelle



Oct 7 2013 10:08PM
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flyingsqirrel3
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thats what I thought, but then I decided I could have a little fun with the poem

you think he/she'll pay me?
Oct 7 2013 10:19PM
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Sno.
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High Karma rating. I give it 5-1 odds.
Oct 7 2013 10:20PM
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flyingsqirrel3
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except the poem absolutely sucks haha
Oct 7 2013 10:21PM
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Sno.
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yeah but pickers can't be choosers. I like that you threw a simile in just for fun.
Oct 7 2013 10:22PM
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CosmicBrownie
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$1.33 per line isnt bad money...
Oct 7 2013 10:24PM
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theBearJew
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From past threads I've seen by her she seems credible. I'd put $5 on it.
Oct 7 2013 10:25PM
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Chubbs.
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The life of a skier
revolved around the seasons
their minds a jack in the box
ready to jump with the ticking of the crank
as the snow begins to fall

Summer brings practice
grass becomes a landing zone
their spins inching farther every time
towards greatness

Fall brings colors
but also anticipation
the first frost a sign
winter is knocking on the door

Winter brings snow
snow brings skiers
their lives revolved around frozen water droplets
nothing else is important

Spring is a time of peace
a skier relaxes his mind
his joints and muscles aching
but his body is content

sorry might be a little long
Oct 7 2013 10:29PM
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bigbromskier
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Quiet solitude; a hidden battle.
Toss and turn
Roll and tuck
Difficult finding the saddle.

On the ride, journeys fly.
Chase ensues,
feet subdued,
Lassoed despite any try.

Lovers lost reappear.
As one, as her,
As another, for another.
Conscious gained reaffirms 'alas it's not my dear.'

Troubled depths and wavering steps.
Uncertain and varied,
Unavoidably pulled, resulting so harried.
Warily lured for continued reps.

Charging by sun, building for the fight.
Energy expelled,
All strength felled.
Settle in for the trauma of the night.



ready for sleeep. have weird dreams sometimes.
Oct 7 2013 10:41PM
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.AR6rider.
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John and Mary had never met. They were like two hummingbirds who had also never met.

They lived in a typical suburban neighborhood with picket fences reminiscent of Nancy Kerrigan's teeth

He saw her for the first time that night

Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that had its sides gently compressed by a thigh master

And a deep, throaty, genuine laugh. Like that sound a dog makes just before it throws up. He was in love.

His thoughts tumbled in his head, making a breaking alliances like underpants in a dryer without ClingFree

It began to rain. Mary's hair glistened like a nose hair after a sneeze.

The raindrops leaped from the pavement, like maggots when you fry them in grease.

Shots rang out! Mary ran like a freight train that had left Cleveland at 6:00 PM traveling at 55MPH

John chased her. He had a hungry look, like the kind you get from not eating for a while.

She was his now. No way out of the abandoned building. The scene took on an eerie, surreal quality, like

When you're on vacation and Jeopardy comes on at 6:00 instead of 7:00

Realizing there was no way out, Mary rose gracefully en pointe and extended her slender leg behind her,

Like a dog at a fire hydrant.

She jumped 12 stories, hitting the pavement like a hefty bag filled with vegetable soup.
Oct 7 2013 11:03PM
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_DUSTY_
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It was a chilling cold fright

And the freaks were flowing in

My mind was made up

And full of whim

Fearful one could say

Ambivalent feelings for today

Tired one could say

Down to earth I'll stay

Up up up they pray

Macabre holds its sway

Bad for me the visions

Climbing high towards the grail

Undaunted by the task

Naturally tied by ties of kindred

Truly ties to trap the seeking souls


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anyone?

Oct 7 2013 11:03PM
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flyingsqirrel3
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this is great, but where's the metaphor
Oct 7 2013 11:15PM
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Sno.
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7:30! Wheel is at 7....doh.
Oct 7 2013 11:47PM
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flyingsqirrel3
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Yeah, what kind of person doesn't know that???
Oct 8 2013 11:18PM
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Finkle
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It is winter in the village.

Though not as cold as my heart.

Cradled like a mothers blanket.

Aspens shiver in the snowy dusk.

The wires sound like hinges, I they may have rust.

Lying on this frozen river, my heart begins to trust.

My heart a mountain, whats my choice.

Edging closer to the future.

Boundless by the force of nature, which kept me at the start.

Deeper do I slide, feet beneath the earth.

leaving frozen trails of mist back where I left my heart.

Memories fill this cup of an earth.

Secrets stored.

Moving mountains to the future.

To settle this last score.

...that was painful on a cell phone.
Not re-reading. So much time wasted.









Oct 9 2013 12:23AM
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Caspaaa
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Not sure if it fits your criteria but here ya go

The things they carried with them
Hindered their progress over gray fields
Regardless they marched imminently
Without stopping to heal

The ashy rain fell from thick air
But the men held more than they could bear
As the cold turned their faces to blue
The things they carried carried them through

They lived on memories of living and dead
While the snow covered land played games with their heads
Long forgotten hope resurfaced at night
But the soldiers fought on until they saw light

The things that they carried
Could never do them good
They broke themselves down
And died where they stood
Now each man walks slowly
Without purpose or heart
Without the guts to admit it
They were dead from the start
Oct 9 2013 12:30AM
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flyingsqirrel3
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Anybody been paid?
Oct 15 2013 11:25PM
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Anathema
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she should pay you in tits.


she gets to save her money, get some attention to boost her confidence or whatever the fuck women get out of having guys all googley eyed over them, and you guys get tits out of it!



sounds like a good plan to me. k great, one is glad to be of service.
Oct 15 2013 11:34PM
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Wallisch_pl
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Op is gay the end
Oct 15 2013 11:57PM
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Wallisch_pl
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Where's my 20$
Oct 15 2013 11:57PM
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Chubbs.
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Wheres my 20$..
Oct 16 2013 12:40AM
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Sno.
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calling out OP. Was anyone paid?
Dec 11 2013 3:13AM
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GSPhotography
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haha this is hilarious. i dont go on ns that often. Posted that as an escape route. Ended up doing the pome myself and got a 100% mark. Thanks all for posting. Cant imagine what people do here for some money.
How about that, You guys pick the best Poem and Ill send 5$ to that person for the effort?
Dec 17 2013 1:05AM
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cool_name
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Rose are red
Violets are blue
I fucked op's mom
It was the bomb
Dec 17 2013 5:23PM
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DR.SHRED
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cool_name has my vote
Dec 17 2013 5:56PM
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Benson.
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AR6
Dec 17 2013 6:09PM
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