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Critique: The ender part in this years urban movie

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CrotchKiller
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First year I have really filmed urban and pretty happy wit how it turned out

Teaser:

Stuck in Steamboat Teaser from Jacob Marshall on Vimeo.




Ending Part
Password: shawn

Shawn Rough Cut from Jacob Marshall on Vimeo.



-Still a rough cut and still planning on changing a few shots(especially a few of the b-roll shots.)
-Wish i had at least some glide-cam shots but i was absolutely paranoid that i was going to screw the shot up haha
-No sound or color has been done yet.
-Really wish I had enough footy to finish out the song but it just didn't work out

Let me know what you think!

Apr 11 2013 11:25AM
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j.benziger
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I liked it a lot looked very professional and overall good the only thing is. On some of the night urban shots the video looked very yellow. That was the only thing i really noticed tho. Good JOB!

Apr 11 2013 11:32AM
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CrotchKiller
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Thanks man! You referring to the long down rail with the donkey? That spot was naturally lit by overhead lights and cast that nasty orangish hue, gotta do some color work on that for sure.
Apr 11 2013 11:37AM
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cultrara
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I loved the editing and how well you matched it up the the music. The only thing I would change is the last shot. If thats the end of the movie, I would swap it for one of the more impressive shots from earlier in the segment.
Apr 11 2013 11:38AM
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CrotchKiller
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For sure, what shots did you think were more impressive? That was the shot that the rider thought was the most banger so i went with that haha.

Apr 11 2013 11:47AM
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CrotchKiller
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Also if anyone has critiques on the lighting in the night shots that would be greatly appreciated, definitely one of my weak spots.
Apr 11 2013 11:49AM
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loganimlach
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backlight, backlight, backlight. that's one of the biggest mistakes people make aside from whitebalancing. berman has told me multiple times when i'm out shooting for myself that even if you only have 2 lights, use one of them to backlight. adds depth so your shot doesn't look flat. the only other thing i saw is that you have some serious whitebalancing issues.

my only gripe as far as content is that there were so many shots on the same features. if he happens to get 2 hammers on the same spot, then by all means show both, but dont show a 5050 then a 5-0 right after it.

other than that well done. and fading the song out wasn't that bad on this track.
Apr 11 2013 12:19PM
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Jewschoolers
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i was going to say this
Apr 11 2013 2:08PM
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BrightonFridays
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^^oh man Berman opinion always appreciated

I agree thought just keep the 5-0, the trick is technically way better than just a 50-50. If you want to keep both it would have worked to switch up angles when he got the first one.

I am super stoked on it though. Great song choice!!!

Also maybe work with the audio level a bit. There were a few moments when it would be pretty loud and you would make a cut and everything would go quiet (the beginning of the next shot was quiet). Try extending some of the audio into the next clip or just fade it out. Your editing is smooth but some of the audio doesn't match that.
Apr 11 2013 2:28PM
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CrotchKiller
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for sure^ haven't even touched the audio yet, definitely have some plans for that.

Apr 11 2013 2:48PM
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loganimlach
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can't tell if you're being a smart ass or not
Apr 11 2013 2:54PM
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BrightonFridays
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^not being a smart ass

Apr 11 2013 2:57PM
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BrightonFridays
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^^ Berman makes the best ski movies out. Its nice to hear some of the little things
Apr 11 2013 2:59PM
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will_powder
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Too many 50-50 front 1s. Especially if he has a different shot at that spot too. Sick otherwise, I enjoyed that.
Apr 11 2013 11:50PM
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