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I'm putting together a promo to send to some local businesses and potential sponsors for a short film I'm making. This is the first draft and I'm looking for some advice on what needs work or should be changed. Thanks in advance.
So i'm gonna be kinda harsh just to kind of help you here, so don't take it the wrong way.
1. its too long for a promo or the content is too boring for the length. I had to start skipping eventually. There are a bunch of shots you could cut for sure that just feel like "filler" lots of repetitive angles that just dont really need to be in there, you know what im saying? just wasnt that exciting of a video to me, i think maybe a faster/upbeat song would help this.
2. what are you going to say to a company/shop/business that gets back to you and asks "why should we sponsor you film? what benefit do we gain from this video? how will this help our company/shop/business?" like i understand what youre going for but theyre gonna see this video thats basically an edit of a bunch of random people they dont know with a logo at the beginning. If you want to appeal to a sponsor, write up a short proposal and explanation of who you are and what youre target audience is (NS, facebook, etc)
As the others said a bit long, I don't know if that song is overused, or if I have just seen too many edits with it recently, if you are trying to pitch a short film it might be a good idea to used unlicensed music. It was definitely sweet and I am certainly not trying to hate, just give helpful feedback... I would have cut the audio of ya'll cheering when he sent the big cliff, it kind of jared me since the rest of the edit was so quiet, if you do end up needing to cut scenes I personally would drop the shot of the guy skiing down the slide and the one of the sky with the power pole in it, both of those kind of rubbed me wrong for some reason. of course these are all very subjective suggestions so go with whatever you want...nice job!
I agree with Evan, and if you're actually planning on sending it to local businesses/using as a promo, you're going to want a much larger variety of shots. It wasn't bad, but any client is going to want to see more than just skiing when in a video of that nature.