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New Edit- Afternoon Chills - Critique?

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cwillygood
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Hey guys, i just made this new edit and im pretty happy how it turned out, i want to know what else i could work on? I know the audio isnt great, im saving up for a mic and the glidecaming could use some work like always




rate it up if you like it

https://www.newschoolers.com/watch/604211.0/I-d-Rather-Be-Skiing--Episode-4---Afternoon-Chills?c=11&o=10&t=2

thanks guys
Jan 24 2013 7:07PM
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cwillygood
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bump anyone???
Jan 31 2013 9:56PM
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[J_Gasper]
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i liked it. had a real good vibe to it.


a couple things though. honestly, id lose the titles. Ive been working on motion tracking titles as well, and i feel like most of the time, it looks pretty cheesy, unless shooting with named pros.


some shots were a little underexposed, but not bad at all for the most part.
Jan 31 2013 10:09PM
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Sklar
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I agree that the motion tracked titles don't really work that well
the cut at :23 is just awkward and confusing, flashing the other clip, would maybe work with a way different song
Same thing at :31
The way you cut the inrun shots of the first tricks was awkward. It looks like you just cut a bit out right in the middle of a clip. It wasn't enough to differentiate the parts of the clip, but still disrupted the continuity.
I would try not to use the fade to black as often, it worked okay the first time, but wasn't necessary again, try using the shots and the music to transition more naturally
It's good to see that you tried to vary the glidecam angles some, i was going to point that out
some of your shots needed to be closer ie. :58
again, i don't think the quick cuts really worked with the song, and the fade to black was unneeded
the title stuck in the middle was kind of awkward

Jan 31 2013 10:59PM
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cwillygood
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Thanks guys! have you both at 10/10

Yeah i wanted to try something different with the titles, i liked how the first one came out but i agree that the other ones are kind of cheesy, i kinda like how the first cut went with the song, but agree the other ones were not really natural and flowed with it...hopefully i can fix those things for next time!
Feb 1 2013 6:42AM
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