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Critique My Design Please (+K)

WinterStick

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Loner

It's a very simple design, but tell me which design you like best and if there is anything I can do to improve upon it!

It will be on a t-shirt.

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3) (same as #2, with a smaller "in")

Nov 20 2012 11:48AM

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coolflash8

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#2. but you might want to make all the lines a little thicker

Nov 20 2012 11:49AM

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DayMan

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No Life

this

Nov 20 2012 11:50AM

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four1two

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Lame

you should use a different color than blue for the outline, or maybe fill in the outline. If it were my design i would just do ILLINOIS with ILL in red. The "i put..." part reminds me of those douchy nike shirts

Nov 20 2012 11:51AM

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theBearJew

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Crazy Fool

Try this? Just a quick thought cause the letters follow and it seems interesting

Same style design as what you have, but do

I PUT THE
I L L
I N
N O I S

Probably gonna look stupid but cause "in" follows "ill" in Illinois

Nov 20 2012 11:52AM

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PASKIINGSUCKS

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Crazy Fool

Not to get all political but you should definitely try that saying over a stencil of good ole Barry O.

Nov 20 2012 11:56AM

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WinterStick

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Haha, I like that idea! But it was better in theory than in practice :( It takes away from the look of those douchy nike shirts that four1two mentioned. I've been trying to make the outline thicker, but I can't figure out how. Guess I'll have to change the color so it's easier to see.

Nov 20 2012 12:03PM

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Laurent.

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Crazy Fool

It hurts my eyes.

Nov 20 2012 12:11PM

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WinterStick

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Sorry to hear that!

Nov 20 2012 12:18PM

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theBearJew

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Crazy Fool

Ahhh bummer! I didn't think it would turn out well. But it looked good in my head.

Nov 20 2012 12:24PM

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Puns

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FIRST ONE. cause it says ill in which is like ill'in which means something in the hood I'm sure. also make the lines thickr

Nov 20 2012 12:40PM

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Lansfield

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I think you should have the ILL red in the illinois aswell, kind of like

I put the ill in illinois

Of course with the colors, but the italics are just to show the idea

Nov 20 2012 12:44PM

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Backyard.Skier

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I'd say #1

Nov 20 2012 12:47PM

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Nieds

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Insane

1 and 2 are both decent.

Nov 20 2012 1:03PM

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WinterStick

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I lost it at this.

Nov 20 2012 1:08PM

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Laurent.

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Crazy Fool

I'm watching this from behind my ridiculously expensive and meticulous colour calibrated monitor.
At half brightness the contrast between the colours is still to harsh, it is simply painful too look at.

Nov 20 2012 1:08PM

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WinterStick

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Loner

Tried this after you said it, but since the red "ILL" already stands out so much, having two in there is just like rubbing it in your face.

Nov 20 2012 1:11PM

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