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Critique my super short promo sort of thing...

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BolderPro
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It is a really short little video that I'm trying to make look like sort of a fast paced promo of what i want to do with trampoline videos. I think it looks pretty good and the shots ar really simple but I'm just wondering what you think about the music and start I'm wondering if the beginning needs an intro or can it just get into it like it does thanks a lot +k


Apr 23 2012 12:53AM
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corona
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I think the sound editing could use a bit more work. mostly with where you decide to start and stop the music. It just doesn't flow very well I find. And the beginning was a bit awkward. how it just jumped into it. decent though. nice dubs.
Apr 23 2012 1:05AM
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eheath
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The beginning was abrupt as was the end. I didn't really understand what was going on the entire time.
Apr 23 2012 1:51AM
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juicedrummer11
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im with evan on this one.. seems fast...but not fast paced for an editing style if that makes sense. its only a few different shots stretched over 20 seconds but then the music cuts for an interview then not much happening after that.

i see what you were going for but i think you could add a few more shots of other stuff and not the attempt at a double, just the landed one, and after the interview something besides the same scene for the text, maybe just make that a black background and it could be a bit more effective.

good idea tho, and i would say make it 30 seconds since that is about what every commercial is anyway. my $0.02
Apr 23 2012 2:27AM
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BolderPro
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Thanks guys i knew it wasn't done and i was just trying to see what or if i could do something to make it flow a little bit I'm trying to think of a way to have it be a little longer and be a little smoother but i definitely have more of an idea know.
Apr 23 2012 11:29AM
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Bmo.
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i agree with the other guys, the story should have been more obvious. but i really enjoyed the video. shots were really nice, i liked the concept, vibe was sick, just work on that story line and you got a winner. definitely want to see the finished product
Apr 23 2012 1:23PM
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BolderPro
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Kind of changed it up a lot don't know if it is better but tell me what you like idk it is kind of a hard video to make because i don't feel that most clips would fit in and i feel it has to be action all the way through if this I kind of had to take away so much emphasis on just the double and spread it out.


Apr 23 2012 2:37PM
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BolderPro
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Do you like the new one better or is a better with the only trick being the double
Apr 23 2012 2:49PM
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screamin_seamen
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You should check out my production company when you get the chance... typingonmacbookpro productions
Apr 24 2012 11:26AM
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Film.
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This ones better I still don't understand the end though?
Apr 24 2012 11:35AM
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BolderPro
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Link? Is it for realz?
Apr 24 2012 4:12PM
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