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How about a critique?

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[J_Gasper]
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Only need a critique on the first song only. The second one was already posted up a few months ago, but will take some tips if you have the time!

Some obvious flaws with some colors in the shots, but think it turned out well.

3rd edit I have made.


+K for help!
Feb 28 2012 7:42PM
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-GL-
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enjoyed it! I love edits that tell a story like that, only critique is re-do the intro voiceover I like the script but its a little to dull if you know what I mean.
Feb 28 2012 8:16PM
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[J_Gasper]
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completely know what you mean. it was a little to staged now that i realize it. pretty bland to. oh well.


thanks man!
Feb 28 2012 8:18PM
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[J_Gasper]
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bump?
Feb 28 2012 10:35PM
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[J_Gasper]
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Come on. Anyone?
Feb 29 2012 1:30PM
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[J_Gasper]
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please? Final bump
Mar 1 2012 3:03PM
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chris.goodhue
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it was cool! the only thing i can say is that there were a few repetitive tricks in there, overall it was good, but i would agree that i found the voice over cool, but his voice was really dull
Mar 1 2012 3:30PM
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[J_Gasper]
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thanks dog! tricks were repetitive. i always have a problem finding riders to film haha. but +K!
Mar 1 2012 3:45PM
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bustinthejus
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Shorten up the edit then! No point dragging it out if you don't have enough unique shots to fill the time.
Mar 1 2012 10:22PM
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[J_Gasper]
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The only reason it was long was because i needed a video at least 5 min long for a contest. Otherwise, it would have been about 2 and a half or 3 minutes only. Thanks for the input!
Mar 1 2012 11:55PM
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[J_Gasper]
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Bumpp
Mar 2 2012 12:46PM
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skithedirt
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hell yeah for G Eazy for the second song
Mar 2 2012 4:29PM
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[J_Gasper]
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g eazy is the shit
Mar 2 2012 4:32PM
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Tbrazier
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Really good! I loved the shots and the into at the beginning provided a nice story line. The script is a little dry, maybe try re-recording the narrative agian. Otherwise, very good!
Mar 5 2012 2:18PM
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[J_Gasper]
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^ thanks dude! Glad you liked it. Shoulda put a
Mar 5 2012 2:34PM
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[J_Gasper]
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Sorry. On mobile. Shoulda put a bit more effort in the script. Oh well. Thanks dog!
Mar 5 2012 2:34PM
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goodiepocket
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watching right now, first thing I noticed was you should flop the shot at :45 so that it makes more sense with the direction the truck goes out of frame in the shot that it is leaving your driveway. Hope this makes sense...
Mar 5 2012 2:39PM
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goodiepocket
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looks like a fun trip! I like the filming and editing, I would check your white balance on a bunch of your shots though and match them a bit better. nice work
Mar 5 2012 2:41PM
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[J_Gasper]
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completely agree. that was actually the shot i was originally going for, but fucked it up by keep panning with the truck to far down the road.

as for the white balance, This is a span of about 3 or 4 months of filming. Tough to keep the colors right when pretty much every shot is different. thanks for the input!

+K to everyone. keep the critiques coming
Mar 5 2012 3:15PM
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stoned_sorcerer
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Liked the edit, the song really helped set the mood too. But as said before the talking sounds kinda like an elementary school poem recital.
Mar 5 2012 3:17PM
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goodiepocket
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just use a simple color correction tool in whatever editing program you are using to adjust the white balance.

(EX: 3 way color corrector in FCP)
Mar 5 2012 5:44PM
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[J_Gasper]
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I know, but it still doesnt really look the same. i tried my best with the color corrector, but just doesnt provide the same image as if it were all the same in camera

Mar 5 2012 5:52PM
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