So I don't have a ton of time, but this is what I got from that:
This isn't a serious edit by any means, and I don't mean that in a bad way. It means that it's fun as fuck to watch; you're showing all the fun you guys have skiing, and every one of us who watches this can relate to that.
However, when it comes to "critiquing" ...this really isn't critique-able. It's not serious. No thought went into filming or editing. It was all for fun. It is "art" in a way, but its not an art that we can critique. If you want to do something more serious, grab a tripod, start planning shots, get rid of the colors and arrows and inconsistencies in your titles, shorten the whole thing to no more than 3-4 minutes, and you'll be on your way. But until then your edits are gonna be fun, not artful.
I know this may come across a little harsh but don't get me wrong, I love the fun edits. It would do you well to balance fun with serious. Check this webisode out: IMO it's the perfect balance of fun and serious. Notice how it mixes followcams on the fly with serious, post up, long lens jump shots. Something along these lines might be what you should try and move towards.
https://www.newschoolers.com/watch/424719.0/Family-Vacation-Episode-3
Good luck, hope this helps. Cheers!
M