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Critique my documentary?

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-GL-
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I know this is a little different than most critique threads in the forum but I'm a 15 year old sophmore from Rhode Island and I made this documentary on the Dalai Lama for National History day. The interview sections were shot with a Canon 5d and all b roll/news-clips are from archive.org, also it was cut in Final Cut Pro.

Enjoy! please comment and remember to watch in hd!

<iframe src="http://player.vimeo.com/video/36257163?title=0&byline=0&portrait=0&color=f0a01f" width="440" height="248" frameborder="0" webkitAllowFullScreen mozallowfullscreen allowFullScreen></iframe>

(hopefully embed works and if it doesnt heres the link)


Feb 5 2012 10:40PM
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Jaymon
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I really liked it. Very well done and the way the story came together was very professional.

I am huge fan of Tenzin and have actually seen him speak on multiple occasions so I may be biased into believing that all things dalai lama related are beautiful.


If I had to give you a critique the only thing I would say is to have more speakers, It becomes slightly redundant and unprofessional to have a documentary with only one point of view.
Feb 5 2012 11:33PM
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WillStart
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just out of curiosity, why do you have a Pro account? i would never want one for personal use.
Feb 5 2012 11:40PM
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WillStart
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ah looks like it might be your dad's account or something?
Feb 5 2012 11:42PM
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Yeah its my dads, he actually makes documentries, commercials, etc for a living mostly for non-profit organaztions.


Jaymon thanks for the feedback he really is an extradorindary person and your probably right with getting multiple speakers but the documentry must be under 10 minutes and I honestly ran out of time to find more people to interview.
Feb 6 2012 8:59PM
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bump k+ for embed
Feb 7 2012 7:55PM
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NickSki.
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Dalai Lama Master from John Lavall on Vimeo.

Feb 7 2012 7:58PM
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Ended up losing to a slideshow, great..... Eh it was fun making I'm just a little disappointed I put so much work into it for nothing and lost to a "documentry" with no literally no video in it. I did get a 90 as a grade on it though which makes me pretty stoked.


Thanks everyone for the help! I look forward to posting again in M&A
Mar 12 2012 4:52PM
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