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Need a quick critique.

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iLLbiLLy
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I made this graphic for a blog (friends blog) I'm putting together and being as I'm a computer scientist and not a graphic designer I would love some feed back.

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I like the concept but I think I may need to improve the readability.
Oct 12 2011 7:48PM
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iLLbiLLy
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bump because I can't make up my mind...
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is this one better or worse? are they both crap?

I'm glad I'm not a professional designer. Shit is way too hard
Oct 12 2011 8:08PM
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Jakx~
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I like the second better than the first. I can read it. But i feel it might be a little tacky, and color scheme isn't my favorite. But for not being a graphic designer I would say its a good start.

Reference purposes; I'm 16, little to no knowledge other than self creativity on subject. But i thought i'd give my opinion for the heck of it.

Oct 13 2011 12:30AM
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juicedrummer11
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2nd one is better imo but maybe clean up the lettering a little even tho i know the style your trying to go for i think
Oct 13 2011 12:38AM
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erikK
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I like the second more, kinda hard to read though still. It might be just me but the "a" stands out too much since it's yellow, which diverts my eyes away from the whole word and I focus on the a. I am not a credible source whatsoever and might be completely wrong.
Oct 13 2011 12:47AM
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iLLbiLLy
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After being away from it and coming back this morning I realized that they both were crap. I redid it this morning and I'm much happier with the results.

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Still making a few minor tweaks but the idea is that this will play once whenever the user navigates to the 'beats' page.
Oct 13 2011 3:44PM
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juicedrummer11
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much cleaner
Oct 13 2011 10:36PM
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Jakx~
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I actually think that's really sweet!
Oct 14 2011 9:36AM
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