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Ok so i originally wanted to do this for the pilot contest but i didnt get it done intime and i didnt really have a plot that i thought would be something worth anyones while so now im just going to make these edits!
so ill just keep posting them in here as they get made so i dont keep making a bunch of threads.
I will be honest I barely skipped through the first one...
I sound like a dick but Il tell you why and at the same time It will show you what to improve.
I would say take away the shots with nothing interesting happening but then there would be nothing. theres no content here, only what seems like a never ending intro of unrelated filler. Add some content, I feel like a watched a video about absolutely nothing.
The shots you had were not that great either.. sometimes Il accept random filler if its absolutely gorgeous but there wasnt anything that stood out, actualy a lot of it was badly framed.
take off frame blending, makes me feel bad drunk and makes you look amateur.
Now your probably going to say, well you didnt look at the others and your right, maybee theres something there but you just completely lost my attention by never telling me what this was about in your first video.
i liked the start of the first shot of the extra footage one, where u had the camera sliding and the guy did the backflip. Seemed like u left it a little long, especially with the guy on the right just staring, but other than that it was nice. I'm not a huge fan of the jump cuts, a couple are alright, and it may seem to make the music fit, but I am from burlington, and if you want to give a more accurate depiction of it, I would use like calmer music that matches the vibe of your footage, not edit the footage to fit the music (the songs were nice, but I'm not sure if they were the right ones to use). This is somewhat related to the last about fitting with the natural vibe, the combination of really fast cuts with a lot of effects/filters made it seem kind of over edited. Also doing some color correction and using some sort of stabilization would help. I'm not sure if it was stylistic or unintentional for both of these. Lastly, what would you say your story is? What message are you trying to send? Storyboarding can be really helpful, even if it is just informal, because that can help you figure out how each shot helps to progress the story. I like the idea, and you have some nice stuff, and I hope I am not being to harsh here. I am a little confused at this point, but you have potential. Also, just wondering, what did you film with/what is your set up?
