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kootenayklaus
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Anyone want to give me a critique?

Jun 24 2011 5:59PM
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kootenayklaus
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An refrain from saying anything about the framerate, that's just Vegas being stupid....
Jun 24 2011 6:36PM
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WillStart
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I'm gonna be as thorough as possible since this edit is really fucking good man

-First shot is beautiful. Incredible grading
-The colored text was really cool, but the 'presented by' text felt a little amateur, maybe if it was bolder? Idk, I'm no good with text
-make sure all your text fades evenly
-blacks were a little too blue in the first skating shot, but the way you sequenced the first two skating shots was real nice
-shot at 00:29 was a little dark. bring up the mids a little more on shots like that
-shot at 00:45 was composed really well and graded perfectly. however, the next shot's grading didn't quite match; it wasn't as flat.
-shot at 00:53 could have used a nice tilt down, but the static shot works well too
-at 00:54, watch for black gaps between clips
-shots at 00:58 and 1:01 were both composed and graded very well
-shot at 1:13 was dope
-shot at 1:17 was REALLY dope
-shot at 1:21 was equally dope but could have been brightened up
-shot at 1:23 was perfect and in my opinion should have been the closing shot. the close-up you had after it was nice but the first angle was amazing. would have liked to have seen that whole shot play out.
-nice song choice!


again, really dope edit nik, amazing work
Jun 24 2011 7:54PM
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WillStart
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couple more things!!

i would love to hear you maybe play with the skate/ski/ambient audio more in the future. it can really add a lot and i'm sure you would do a great job with it

do you have any sort of slider or dolly? if you don't you should definitely invest in one, especially for a skatepark. there are so many angles and shapes that a slider or dolly can really emphasize the depth of a skatepark
Jun 24 2011 7:57PM
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kootenayklaus
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Excellent. Thank you so much, this is exactly what I was looking for.
Jun 24 2011 8:02PM
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Stickity
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i can't help you with filming or editing much but there were a few shots that maybe should have been moved to get more of what was happening in the shot

but i really liked that you had skateboarding, bmx, and rollerblading in one edit
Jun 25 2011 9:19AM
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.Max.
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Will pretty much got it. Only other thing is you left a frame of space between several cuts, I always zoom in and scroll along the entire timeline when I'm finished with an edit to ensure I don't miss any of those.

I also wasn't a fan of the timelapse intro, it didn't seem to do the rest of your footage justice.

Really well done over all though, I like your style when it comes to grading.
Jun 25 2011 10:23AM
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.Max.
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One more thing, you seemed to draw out a few of the shots longer than nessecary, for example the shot at 00:49, you could have cut right when the skater left the frame, but waited for that next downbeat. Just creates a slightly laggy feel when you're really looking.
Jun 25 2011 10:26AM
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