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well for my application essay i have basically have to write about an extra curricular that has impacted my life. So the first thing i thought of was of course skiing. Anyway i am a terrible writer an this is my first draft. If anyone wants to help me proofread or give helpful feed back i will appreciate it. here it is..

Skiing is more than an activity I do for fun. It has influenced my life in so many ways and has made me become the person I am today. Skiing has made me become an individual and taught me to be myself. It has made become a dedicated hard worker, and it has made me become more outgoing and sociable.

            When you are just cruising down the slope or throwing down tricks in the terrain park, creating your own style and being different is one of the most fun things about skiing. It is all about being yourself. Since skiing has such a big influence on me, being myself transitions into my everyday life. I always try to do my own thing and try to be an individual. Also being yourself and being different is more fun than being like everyone else anyway.

            Skiing has also made me become a dedicated hard-working person. When I am trying to learn a new trick or get better at turning, I am often frustrated when I cannot seem to get it right. I will spend an entire day if I have to, to get it perfected, just to better myself. It is the same thing outside of skiing. When I am working on a task whether it is school or a job, I cannot stop until it is done or I am satisfied with it. Sometimes I will stay up all night if I have to, to get the task done.  

            I am also a more outgoing sociable person because of skiing. One of favorite things to do while skiing is meeting new people on the chair lift. I have met so many different kinds of people on chair lifts. I have met old seasoned skiers sharing their experiences with me, I have met people new to skiing and have given them advice, and I have even met people my age that I have ended up being friends with off the mountain. I am just so used to talking to different kinds of people I find it easier to communicate with others in everyday life.

            Skiing is such an important part of my life. It has shaped my personality in so many ways making me the person I am today. Thanks to skiing I am always myself and an individual.  I am a dedicated hard-working person, and I am more outgoing and better at communicating with others.