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Critique my edit NOW!

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Yung_Gnarley
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A Day at Ruby Hill with Jack Knill from Jack Knill on Vimeo.




thanks dudes!!
Mar 25 2010 10:03PM
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Turner.
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overall, I didn't mind the edit.
I didn't think it needed to be as long though, and some of the shots didn't seem edit-worthy to me.(1:18-1:37 was a waste.)
also, I didn't like the intro.
I feel like I'm sounding harsh, but that's my 2 cents.
Mar 25 2010 10:11PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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yeah thanks for the feedback.

and by the way i edited this in about 45 minutes. there were 3 hours of raw footy too haha
Mar 25 2010 10:15PM
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gstaff
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I would say it was a good edit.
-More variety in camera angles wouldv'e been nice
-If someone was there with you a fallow cam wouldv'e been sweet.
-Into. was decent, but i liked the outro alot.
-Overall i would say it was dope
Mar 25 2010 10:42PM
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Scott0_robot0
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it wasnt to bad the music made me turn off the sound though just seemed weird to me
Mar 26 2010 3:40PM
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HIRO
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wear a helmet you scrub
Mar 26 2010 5:17PM
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SkeeOrDye
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be more selective in what shots go in

pick music with a strong beat to it, not just constant noise. That way you have something to sync the shots to and create an audio visual interaction.


Mar 26 2010 5:31PM
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LiamMcKinley
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Id say shorter would be better and switch up the angles. but other than that i liked it. it seemed different from a lot of the other stuff on here for some reason. and i actaully kinda liked the music too. nice work.
Mar 26 2010 5:41PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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hahaha sorry for not using hardcore rap music everybody. my bad
Mar 27 2010 9:24PM
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technique.
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...you asked for criticism

the song you chose was basically just white noise
Mar 27 2010 10:31PM
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ryanschindler
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intro shots were too long for such a fast paced song

don't put any text saying "bail" or any of that kind of stuff, it just looks like a 5 year old messing around with windows movie maker

switch up your angles, use the zoom, or buy a tripod. the shaky nonzoom shitty shots were horrible and brough away from the edit a whole lot.

only watched like a minute but there ya go
Mar 28 2010 1:26PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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haha oh man
Mar 28 2010 4:11PM
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Gameboy
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For a self-edit it was pretty good IMO

I agree that the song choice wasn't the best but the outro made me smile I liked it a lot.

Mar 28 2010 5:56PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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pwease?
Apr 10 2010 11:49PM
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ike.
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overall I liked the edit. I liked the intro pan shots, and many of the skiing shots, but near the end, you were cutting the skier off in the landing, and you used the same angle throughout it. if you switched up the angle a bit more at the end i think it would add alot to the edit
Apr 11 2010 11:43AM
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Yung_Gnarley
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yeah me having very few angles near the end = i have no friends haha
Apr 12 2010 8:02PM
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cultrara
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cut the intro and ending, watching boxes gets boring. other than that i liked the edit. nice song, style, and angles
Apr 12 2010 8:15PM
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MADDECENT
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"Don't film any lifestyle shots" You
Apr 12 2010 8:55PM
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teleak
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this isn't what people are saying, they're saying that you should use a song with more of a beat, so you could sync your editing with it.

Apr 12 2010 10:25PM
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thisandthatfilms
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that was basicly the same trick over and over again, and that song kinda hurt my ears a lot
Apr 12 2010 10:49PM
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screamin_seamen
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calm your music down
Apr 12 2010 11:00PM
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BroBomb
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Good stuff. I'd say you should get a good bit closer with the camera. Obviously some wide shots are good, but closeups should be used more.
Didn't have a problem with the music, but I can see where a stronger bass drum would make it easier to sync it up. And by bass drum I mean a band where a human being uses his foot to kick a pedal, not some GD drum machine or whatever those dingdang rappers are using.
As for the skiing, it's good but maybe throw in some tappity taps or butters or something. Just a little visual variety.
Apr 13 2010 4:10PM
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JamanBird
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i know you guys don't think so...but the song actually does have a strong beat, emphasis on the 2 and 4.
Sounds like you just need to turn your audio levels down to me.
Apr 13 2010 6:14PM
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gabe.
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yup
Apr 13 2010 6:22PM
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Max-Steeze
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i actually liked this edit, the music went pretty good with it but too loud. looks like you guys had a blast on the butter box
Apr 20 2010 9:52PM
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Yung_Gnarley
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totes
Jun 22 2010 6:22PM
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hue.
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this
Jun 22 2010 7:11PM
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