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Critique my edit +K!

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Vebbi
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What can i do diffrent? whats good, and whats bad?

February in åre! from vebjørn on Vimeo.

Mar 3 2010 4:37AM
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cultrara
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good stuff. I like the angles but i thought some of the shots were too far away
Mar 3 2010 3:01PM
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andersteeze
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Legit edit, but IMO in the car intros are abit over done, and i love that song but ive seen it in like 3 edits. some of the landings wernt stopmed. But that constructive criticism is only becasue you asked for it if you wouldent have asked i honestly wouldent have thought of those things because it was a banger edit.

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Mar 3 2010 3:14PM
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RJD2
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I would follow cam almost all the rail shots, not stand on the hill. And when you are following don't be afraid to get really close, you have the wide angle on there. I'd rather be able to not see the top of the skiers head in a shot then have him take up 1/40th of the screen. Save the steadycam shots for when the jump is too big to followcam or you want to get a creative angle.
Mar 3 2010 3:26PM
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RJD2
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The clip from 46seconds to 50 seconds is a good shot of what i was trying to say above... try to make them all more like that one, but a little closer.
Mar 3 2010 3:28PM
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.frenchy
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sick edit, good song to go with rails/jumps too!
Mar 3 2010 3:32PM
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Vebbi
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thanks for the critique. im going to make a new edit on sunday. i will try more follow cam, and i will try to get closer to the rider. ill post it here on monday or something.
Mar 3 2010 5:08PM
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RJD2
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sounds good.
Mar 3 2010 5:11PM
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icantskiiFILM
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it was alrgiht. i mean it was filmed with all fisheye which i would like to see more variety. but if u are gna use all fish then get up real close. someone said before to cut off their head...dont do that but def have it take up the whole frame. on follow cams goin off jumps make sure ur right up there with them so u can see if they land or not. but deff move in closer. and get a better ending. good.
Mar 3 2010 5:13PM
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A.Eberhard
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Pretty good edit, I enjoyed it ,but like said before get closer and so your vignetting ( the black corners ) doesn't shake around like there is a earthquake going on turn OFF your image stabilizer that will stop it from moving around.
Oh ya what's the song?
Mar 3 2010 5:21PM
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icantskiiFILM
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o yea forgot this too..make sure to turn it off.
Mar 3 2010 5:53PM
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Vebbi
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the song is "outlawz - real talk".


Mar 3 2010 6:21PM
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Wild-Willis
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Sick Edit! i really like the song and the intro. Just one problem with the intro was that the spedometer was under 100. next time get a shot of like 120 or something. sick rail skiing too. the jumps were sick but try getting some grabs and bigger spins. overall good edit. kept me entertained
Mar 5 2010 8:51PM
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.newman.
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real nice...
one thing though
work on the ending... it was real abrupt and kinda took away from the edit put in some kind of funny shot of you or your friends, fade th emusic out, and end it.
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put a sick shot in last and fade the music out and listen to everyones reaction to the trick
Mar 6 2010 2:04PM
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Meases_Pieces
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-the beginning was kinda weird- im not a fan of hand gestures and the gangster stuff
- cleaner lens- wipe it off ever so often
- steadier shots
- better weather- really not your fault but i love edits with blue sky not overcast
- build up the tricks from cool - amazing
Mar 6 2010 6:31PM
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Gameboy
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And try to get more diversity from your snowboarding friend cause he was always doing the same trick, but he's steezy for sure.
Mar 7 2010 1:13PM
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ski-swagga
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like others have said everything was great but most shots were too far away.
Mar 7 2010 1:20PM
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Wild-Willis
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Holy Shit! the spedometer goes up to 240?? get it up there, 90 is pussy shit
Mar 8 2010 7:08PM
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RJD2
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kilometers
Mar 8 2010 7:20PM
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ohpatti
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-great song choice
-did that 'smell this shit' thing in the intro in the car with classs
- work on steadier follow cams, but they weren't bad
- like everyone said, get closer on majority of the shots
Mar 9 2010 2:49AM
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