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My not winning traveling circus poem :(

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Shaky_Jake
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Try to follow along as they jib with steeze
Rail to rail or wherever they please
Across the States in beat down cars
Vermont to California, or beyond the stars
Even I am floored at their style and grace
Looking like a gaper with that blank stare face
I cant explain how they do what they do
No one can compare, I mean "what... Jossi who?"
Going and going and going GONE!

Cant compare, and you cant relate
Ian Compton is god, it must be fate
Really I'm floored, I cant find words
Circus in town? Good times for sure
Under no man as they drive by the mile
Ski east to west, having fun all the while
Feb 24 2010 12:50AM
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Shaky_Jake
Posts: 252 - Karma: 14
for those of you who couldn't tell, the first letter of every sentence spells out "traveling circus"...
Feb 24 2010 12:51AM
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rontonsoop
Posts: 237 - Karma: 25
i see what you did there.. lol  +k for being creative.
Feb 24 2010 12:53AM
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BMB
Posts: 3138 - Karma: 232
damn,  that's a winner in my book
Feb 24 2010 2:03AM
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Chompo.
Posts: 4952 - Karma: 88
That actually wasn't bad
Feb 24 2010 7:40AM
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elemeno89
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possibly one of the greatest things ive ever read here on ns.  good work on the creativity and rhyming.  haha
Feb 24 2010 8:10AM
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Big5hifty
Posts: 3243 - Karma: 1,253
that was pretty good man. definitely one of the better things ive read on here
Feb 24 2010 8:25AM
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apcaipse
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That's a pretty rad poem.
Feb 24 2010 9:48AM
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Spinoza
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wow i loved it even before i read your post about it spelling out traveling circus
well done
Feb 24 2010 9:53AM
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.frenchy
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dope poem, +k
Feb 24 2010 10:12AM
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AdolfShitler
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mine went like this:

Andy and Will are good skiers
I like them
They make me lol

The End

Feb 24 2010 10:17AM
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TURTLEMAN1
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+k for having one of the sweetest poems i've ever read

Feb 24 2010 10:18AM
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Shaky_Jake
Posts: 252 - Karma: 14
It took me like 10 minutes to write, so I probably should have revised it a couple times through.  But oh well, the poem that won was pretty epic.
Feb 24 2010 10:42AM
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PDeg
Posts: 178 - Karma: 40
wow i neevr relised it spelled out tc till the first comment
Jul 2 2010 8:17PM
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deleted5
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who won?
Jul 2 2010 8:19PM
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JahJahBinks
Posts: 3567 - Karma: 461
I entered, but lost.
Jul 2 2010 8:23PM
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steezbox
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I do believe "steeze" is spelled without an "e" at the end. I however am not sure completely, but it makes more sense to me.
Jul 2 2010 8:26PM
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Malcolm
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its with an e. and your last sentence didnt make much sense
Jul 2 2010 8:34PM
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TOK
Posts: 2928 - Karma: 2,540
did you actually submit this? I'm only questioning the submission because it wasn't a winner
Jul 3 2010 2:33AM
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gus555
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i nearly shit my pants when i found out it spells traveling circus
Jul 3 2010 6:11PM
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