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Similar to being at a new school for the first time, immigrants face difficulties integrating into their new country. We often take for granted that we live in such a developed society where people from all around the world dream about coming to. When immigrants arrive they often find it hard to blend in because they are not accustomed to our tradition and cultures. Within this text are three short stories that each depicts the immigrant experience in a different way.

The short story "Jasmine" by Bharati Mukherjee is about a woman named Jasmine who travels illegally to America in search of a better life. She must choose between leaving her family and friends in Trinidad, or risking it all for a chance to exercise her true potential in a completely new environment. In the short story “Jasmine”, the main character believes that she won’t go far in life if she stays in Trinidad and therefore chooses to move to a more ambitious place. Upon coming to the United States, Jasmine quickly feels at home. “real money was worn and green, American dollars. Holding the bills in her fist on a street corner meant she had made it in okay.” P. 26. In the beginning of the story, money is used as a symbol. Jasmine even admits that Trinidad’s and Canada’s money are nicer looking than American money, but describes it as feeling more real than any other. Throughout the world, the united States are known for the opportunities accosiated with their economy. Jasmine prefers the tattered American bills to her own Country’s because she sees potential through them and feels she can finally make something of her life. Even though jasmine quickly adapts to her new environment, she still cannot fight some of her past traits. “The reggae and steel drums brought out the old Jasmine […] She hadn’t heard real music since she got to Detroit” Loretta and Viola invite Jasmine to go see a concert. Although Jasmine feels as though she has conformed to American society, she cannot help herself as she dances to the familiar, exotic music which originated in her homeland, Trinidad. "You're really something, flower of Trinidad." "flower of Ann Arbour, she said, "not Trinidad". The fact that Jasmine corrects the fisherman means that she is basically trying to discard her past. Even after spending a short amount of time in the United States, Jasmine feels like it is now her new home and considers herself a real American.


The short story “How Are You”, by Marilu Mallet is about two immigrants who come to Montreal to take English classes to be able to work later. In the end of the story, the reader finds out that Casimir was not actually Jewish even though his actions fit into Jewish generalizations. Even though he was not an actual Jew by blood, while trying to integrate into his new society Casimir finds himself staying fairly close knit to others of jewish descent. He buys skates from a Jewish shoemaker and receives a stove as a donation from the Jewish association. “The Daboos asked her to keep books for them and to clean the rooms in the new wing, and she could stay in 16B as long as she likes.” P.26. Similar to Casimir’s situation with the Jews, Jasmine is able to find contacts in the United States simply because the Daboo’s share the same ethnicity as her. In return for a place to stay, Jasmine must help maintain the Daboos’ business.

Much like in the short story "The Other Family" by Himani Bannerji, the little girl tries to assimilate while at the same time subconsciously feeling as though she does not belong. At school she is presented with an assignment where she must draw a family according to an American textbook. It can be assumed that she was not born in her mother’s home country and for this reason does not consider the United States as foreign as her mother does. “The Daboo daughters seemed very American though. They didn’t seem to know that they were nobodies, and kept looking at her and giggling.” P. 26. Usually, the second generation does not take much of an interest in their past culture because they were not raised there and do not feel as much of an attachment as their parents do.