first off this should probably have been posted in median and arts but what ever,
and it is hard to tell quality because of either the uploading or exporting. Now to the critique, i liked it very much but ur shots from behind a bush that were kind of dollyish kept going straight back n forth from one shot to another, this bugged me a little bit but thats probbly jst me thoug, for the dollys try to keep the entire shot in the dolly and to keep the dolly the same speed, it didnt look like u were using a dolly but thats my two cents, and for the editting i think i u wanted a more natural feel u scored it but other wise u should have maybe used a couple transitions and effects. any ways hope i helped