I made a pome for school.

Many days I reminisce

On the things that I have missed

On the people that I have met

On the streets that I have seen

Yet nothing strikes me as being as good as the time that I first stepped out side

Ok so the first four lines dont have any kind of parallel structure. "things that you have missed"--clearly a negative thing. the people you met and the streets you have seen--pretty positive things. then when you say "YET...nothing is as good...", it doesnt make sense because the things you just listed weren't meant to be particularly "good". OBVIOUSLY the things you have missed arent as good as the first time you stepped outside. its like saying: the time i broke my wrist mountain biking wasnt as good as the first time i got laid....yea well no shit. you kinda do the same thing here. if you are trying to emphasize "the first time you stepped outside", you should make the first three things really positive, not just random things.

The feelings that I felt were indescribable

Like powder day it was unforgettable

Like the smell of fresh mountain air

It is not fair

That I have to see you leave me standing here

With nothing to say but good bye to this wonderful year

i dont really understand the introduction of another character in the second to last line. you go from a positive, warm tone decribing mountains, nature, whatever---to "it is not fair", with no rational. i like the last line where you express remorse because the yer is over, but you need a better transition to that.

so yea, sorry if you're like a sophomore in highschool or something...but it just doesnt come across as a thoroughly thought out piece. theres room for improvement though