Skiing was great! looked like an awesome time!
the editing was ok.
Try to make it flow with the song more, pick a song that you could picture skiing to, something with a good beat to follow.
I don't really think the beginning was over edited, but I would have rather had seen you use that beginning to introduce the skiers, or make it more of an introduction to your edit. Its just like making sure you give a good first impression.
Considering this is your first edit its not expected that you will make a great edit either, so nothing to worry about. Trust me, editing and filming gets alot better over time.
What software are you using?