Replying to Writing a formal letter to my ski hill- Advice?

First off our hill makes the suckiest jumps. they make really rolling knuckles and THE flattest landings, which are terrible! they make a lot of snow too so they could have nice bg jumps, but they make these sucky things with flat landings. so me and my friends decided to ban together and write a letter to the management to try and get them to change their ways. we've already talked to the cat manager casually and whatnot. so this is the letter, do you have any advice on what to add/subtract/change?

Dear Birch Hill Recreation Area Staff,

                To start off with, I, Adam Shilling, have skied your hill for the past three or four years, along with plenty of my friends. We have had an unfathomable amount of fun and good times out there, and we would jus t like to say thank you for the facilites and good environment you have set up for us.

                In the past couple of years we have started to progress towards freestyle skiing/snowboarding, and have started to hit more jumps and rails in your terrain park. After landing (and crashing) countless times on your jumps we have a pretty good feel for them. The way the jumps are constructed are just really too flat. When people land they have so much force coming straight down that it causes much pain and discomfort to absorb all of that momentum with your body. However, with steeper landings and a defined knuckle, these problems could be avoided, making for an incredibly nicer jump with virtually the same amount of snow. At the beginning of the season there were the 2 main jumps, and the first one was beautifully constructed. It had a not incredibly poppy lip, a defined knuckle, and a steep landing.  The second however had a very poppy take off and a flat landing, so like earlier described it would hurt a lot to land on a flat landing. If there are any laws or regulations that are keeping this from happening I apologize, for I was not aware of said restrictions. But if not, I really think the Cat driver and the rest of the staff should really consider these ideas, because I think they would be in the best interest of all the park riders here at Birch Hill.

Thank You For Listening,

Adam Shilling

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