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Art, looking for advice

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Caveman.
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For people into art, this a surreal peice I am working on. I feel like Ive ruined it and made it to busy. It's not done yet

Any constructive criticism would be appreciated, thank you.

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Feb 1 2007 9:33PM
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marsland
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the bee really caught my attention.  i completely forget what surreal is but i think its pretty good
Feb 1 2007 9:34PM
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Tom.
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dont like the 2 red blocks. and the Kip Koscol thing is kind of distracting, you got one without that on it?

otherwise it looks great. mabey just a little bit more detail on the bumble bee, and it'd be sick.
Feb 1 2007 9:37PM
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derick
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cool art try drawin sick ski pics
Feb 1 2007 9:39PM
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Jorgen.
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haha for some reason i thought that the bee was a skier till i read the 1st post
Feb 1 2007 9:43PM
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Caveman.
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Yea, thats what I was thinking. According to my art teacher I have to much going on in that part of the picture. Im also going to work the balloons in the sky, the trees and the boxes.
Feb 1 2007 9:45PM
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GreekAR6
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Yeah, I agree about the two boxes, maybe if they were a different color... a little too much red, I think.
Feb 1 2007 10:13PM
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Bini.
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definitely get rid of the kip karol thing, its distracting and conflicting. also, maybe try and hype up the red throughout the picture so it stands out a little more, but also intensify the electric/blue white parts, like the bottom.
Feb 1 2007 10:13PM
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wh@t
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too much red.

space shit out.

eliminate balloons in sky; most of them.

dont clutter ground.

define some color but shade others.
Feb 1 2007 10:17PM
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reggyboy
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try to makes those waves stand out a liitle more use a stronger brighter blue and make the outlines more definate
Feb 1 2007 10:26PM
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SiverMike
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outline the mountain thing in the back with black or a darker blue.
Feb 1 2007 10:40PM
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dspin153
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i'd deffinately go a little deeper on the darks
Feb 1 2007 10:45PM
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Caveman.
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i just put that on their with photoshop cuz im a dumbass
Feb 1 2007 10:48PM
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wAy2sTeEzY4u
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less balloons, i dont like the big trees that much bu nice work for the most part.
Feb 1 2007 10:53PM
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*Fujative*
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take the flower, add more red to the yellow parts. take the bee and brighten to yellow. everything is blue, red and green. keep it that way besides the bee. if the bee is yellow and the flower is yellow, your eye will be attracted to both. no add red to the flower and make the bee brighter.
Feb 1 2007 11:12PM
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skipillager
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Is there a theme? It is sort of busy.. the bee caught my eye as well, but the colours sort of kill each other.
Feb 2 2007 2:10AM
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Casey
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its sort of heavy to the left, i'm not sure if you can do that as a surrealist or not, but that big bright dot sort of distracts from the bee, and the bee is pretty cool. Also I would darken up the floating ones above the mountains, so they don't stand out as much. It's good though, I like it.
Feb 2 2007 2:21AM
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