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No Line, No wait, No Hassle
The way technology is changing the way teens go to concerts
in the 21st century

Remember when you had to wait in line to get tickets for a concert those countless hours just standing their not knowing if you would even get a ticket. Worry no more because it is now the 21st century and technology is forever changing the way we go to concerts. Long lines and waits to get your tickets are now a thing of the past because your tickets can be purchased online effortlessly and with no wait whatsoever. Sounds great doesn’t it no line no wait no hassle it is quick and you instantly know where you will be sitting. The growth of technology even helps you get to the concert in some cases. If you use public transport you have probably noticed that the routs are expanding and it is faster and easier to move around the city. So for teens that can’t get a lift to the concert from their folks, what do they depend on? Exactly and with these new advancements getting to the concert is faster and easier then ever. With the new technology even if you don’t go u can get a lot out of the concert, that’s right. Remember that law on how no cameras are allowed in the concert; well in the 21st century technology is small. With the new supers sleek digital cameras and picture phones it is virtually imposable to detect and you could share part of the concert with your friends who couldn’t come. But what is a concert without any music. That’s where cell phones come into play. With new technology most cell phones have a signal inside the arena, so when the song your friend is just dying to hear live comes on you could call them and let them have a listen. Don’t you hate it when your favorite song comes on and there are people trying to sing it but have no clue? Well technology has a solution for that as well. Now people can download songs and put them on their ipods or mps players. This obviously doesn’t give a person instant knowledge of the song but it makes it more available to them and chances are they will listen to it at least a dozen times as apposed to hearing it once or twice on your way to school. So we now know that the way teens go to concerts partly depends on technology and this technology will continue to change the way that us teens go to concerts

why would u write this?

if you ahve any numbers, spell them out instead of writing 21, write twenty first

ahahaha, im gonna steal that, u stupid nub

ahh school

talk about how gay technology is sometimes like when instead of lighters people hold up cell phones at concerts and how it seems to have lost its soul.

get rid of "because" in a couple of places

haha really

maybe im just ignorant but i would assume that when someone holds up a cell phone at a concert, theyre taking a picture?
anyway it doesnt matter, cell phones are fucking gay

im going to be honest - and im not trying to be an asshole - but this is not a very well written article. if youre trying to get a good grade or something, youre going to have to change it alot. use the thesaurus on microsoft word to find better, more intelligent sounding words. also, the article really didnt have any point to it. you just kindof said that theres new technology, but no shit. thats not anything anyone doesnt already know. talk about the significance of the new technology, that less people will go to concerts b/c they can just get bootleg live recordings, so the music industry will lose revenue. then go into something like how they lose even more money from ppl pirating music from online, and how much this affects the industry, and makes it harder for artists to make a living. just a couple ideas to ponder...

i would if i knew how