Jus need sum quick help with eng Thx

well for eng we had to do a expresive paragraph or whatnot and well i extreamly suck at english so i was wondering if u guys can just take a quick glance at what i whrot and just help me out
it would really be apriciated

well i had to write the paragraph about a some short story called "twelfth Summer"
this is what the instruction was "what are the three strongest qualities that motivate the narrator in the story twelfth summer?"

here is what i got it
(i no like none of you read the story it really dosent matter) i really need some help making a conclusion as well
plz don't make fun of me for my extreamy poor english skills
well this is it

While reading Twelvth summer I found there are quite a
few qualities that modivate the narator throughout the story but
that there are three domenant qualites. First off is jelousy. The

narrator is jelous that Sonny gets all the attention from thier perants

and she is just ignored. An example of this would be when her father

decideds to let sonney cast instead of her evan though she is much

older and wasn't alowed to cast untill a few weaks ago.
Her jelousy of her brother motivates her to want be known when she

grows up and get a trouphy. Evan though she can't decide between a poet

actress or diver she knows she will be famous and her parents will pay

more attention to her. A second quality that motivates the narrator is

confidence. She is confident in her self that when she grows up she

will be famoue even though she gets no support from her parents. As she

says in the book she could picture herself getting awarded for winning

a trophy for diving/acting/writing a poem. A third quality i found that

motivats the charecter is honesty. She is honest throughout the story

and evan though most of the time she doesn't admit stuff out loud she

is honest to herself. A good example of this is when Sonny leave for

his first day of work and she admits to herself that she was lonsome

for him. She is being honest to herself because she admites that she is

a bit jelous of him and also obviusly that she misses him.